Okay I finally finished reading through the whole thing. Good stuff overall but still bogged down by overly flowerly language. Flowerly language has it's place but using fancy sentences to describe a lady chugging soda is just silly, and that's just the most common example that irked me.

Also take this sentence:

"Drawing a clawed finger across his cheek, she soon indulged further, lifting his limp form up and snuggling him; sinking his visage between............."

"She soon indulged further" seems like an unnecessary phrase. Once you read what she does to him next it becmoes obvious to the reader that she is indulging further without having to say it.

Why would you refer to his face as a "visage" ? That word sounds out of place given the situation. Just using "face" is better. Fancy language has it's uses and it was used quite well in some parts of the story (like when the dragon emerges) but I don't think it should be applied to mundane things and situations. Going back to the drinks example:

I don't need you to describe how sweet liquid flows down a person's throat when they're just drinking apple juice. I know what apple juice tastes like and it just seems silly to be so elaborate in describing such a simple act. Generally I write a drinking scene like that only if the person was drinking something unsual and the drink itself merited more description or the act of drinking is very significant.

Plotwise the story is a bit slow at first (though I accept this is inevitable since it takes a while to set up a reason behind her transformations.) but picked up towards the end and definitely leaves a hook for people to read more.